Hooks in narrative writing are a fun way to introduce the elements of narrative writing.  Narrative writing is a less intimidating writing assignment because students feel comfortable telling stories to begin the year.  Allowing students the freedom to share their stories also creates community, builds confidence, and gets the momentum going for the school year. 

What trips students up is the elements of narrative writing and how to use these elements to tell a great story. Hooks in narrative writing are a way to ease students into writing at the beginning of the year, and it brings fun and creativity to the lesson.  Find Narrative Writing Hooks resource here! 

Let’s explore what a hook is and examples of hooks in narrative writing.  

What is a Hook in Narrative Writing?

What are narrative hooks? It is a way to create interest in the story.  A narrative hook may also be known as a lead or an introduction.  

• A hook simply hooks the reader’s attention initially, so they will keep reading.  

• Hooks can vary in length from a couple of sentences to a couple of pages depending on the size of the text.  

• Hooks in narrative writing also give the reader a glimpse of what the story will be about;  it would be a false advertisement to hook the reader with a fantastic hook that had nothing to do with the story. 

6 Examples of Hooks in Narrative Writing

1. Descriptive

A descriptive hook in narrative writing uses imagery to create a picture in the reader’s mind.  A descriptive hook in narrative writing sets the scene, tone/mood, and places the reader in the setting; find how to teach this hook here.  

Here is an example of taking an okay hook to outstanding using the Descriptive hook.

 

Before: The creepy house was close to school.

Revised: Every day, on the way to school, my two best friends and I passed the creepiest house in town. Every inch was covered in moss and vines, leaving only the windows open to stare at you.  The house was always shrouded in darkness and silence, and the smell of rotten meat penetrated the air.  We would arrive at school smelling the rancid air and feeling the dread of having to pass by at the end of the day.  

 

The revised version provides details that allow the reader to “see the creepy.”  While descriptive hooks do not need to be as long as the one above, it is essential to include details that will introduce the reader to elements of the story and what to expect as the story unfolds.  This hook suggests that the following story will be suspenseful, scary, and dark.  

2. Sound Effect (onomatopoeia)

Beginning with a sound effect is adding onomatopoeia to the hook.  The onomatopoeia should add excitement and provide insight into the plot.  

Here is a narrative hook example using  Sound Effect to improve the beginning.

 

Before: The tree was falling toward the school. 

Revised: Snap! Crack!  A dark shadow came across the room as the students rushed to the window to find the source of the loud sound.  They reached the window in time to see the tree falling toward the school.  

 

The sound effect in the revised version provides some excitement and brings the reader into the moment.  The reader can hear and imagine what is happening.  

3. Introduce Character(s)

Another narrative hook example is to describe the main character and introduce an exciting trait about the character that relates to the plot.  

Here is an example of how to improve a hook in narrative writing using the Introduce a Character method.

 

Before: Daniel was nervous. 

Revised: Daniel fidgeted with the button on his coat and avoided eye contact with the people in the meeting.  He hadn’t meant to hurt anyone, and this was his one chance to make amends. 

 

The revised version is more interesting because the reader can feel the character’s nervousness; a connection can be made between the reader and the character.  The hook is ‘showing’ not ‘telling.’  

 

4. Dialogue 

Use dialogue for a hook in narrative writing to create interest in the story.  A quick conversation between characters can draw a reader in and build momentum for the story.  

Here is an example of how Dialogue can improve a hook in narrative writing; find the resource to teach narrative writing hooks here.

 

Before: I was going to be late for my first day, and my dad was impatient.

Revised: “I just need two more minutes Dad!”  I shouted from my room.  “It is the first day, and I have to make a good impression.”

 

I could hear Dad sigh all the way up the stairs. He shouted back, “Just hurry up!   Being late is not a good first impression.”

The before version is not wrong and could easily be used to hook a reader’s interest. The reader is left wondering, The first day of what? Why is the dad waiting? The revised version adds to the questions by developing a relationship between the dad and the character. While it is a small development, the hook is more interesting.  

5. Interesting Comment

This type of narrative writing hook leaves the reader with unanswered questions that encourage the reader to keep reading to discover the answers.  

Here is a way to captivate the reader by using an Interesting Comment as a hook in narrative writing.

 

Before: The door was open when we returned home.

Revised: As we walked up the drive, we noticed the front door was ajar.  Mom insisted we call the police, but Dad walked inside.  

 

Both examples are good; an interesting comment draws a reader into the story.  However, the revised version provides more details and introduces characters.  The revised version brings a human element and connection to the reader.  

6. Action

Bring the reader into the story through action and active verbs.  

Action can give life to a dull narrative hook.  Here is a narrative hook example. 

 

Before: The kitten ruined our house.

Revised: The house was destroyed.  The kitten ran wildly through the house, shredding curtains, chewing leather shoes, and piling kitten toys in the middle of the bed.

 

The reader can begin to get a glimpse of what is happening from the before version, but if the reader has never owned a kitten, they may not have a complete understanding.  The revised version sets the stage and provides action.  The reader is in the moment.  

A great hook in narrative writing will draw the reader into the story and keep them interested, so they want to read the story.  

Students might find they are using elements of several hooks, and they might also not fully understand how to use the hooks. These are common roadblocks that may pop up; Narrative Writing Hooks resource can help.  

It can be a lot of information for students to absorb, so go slow to go fast. 

Check out my blog post, for tips on teaching hooks in narrative writing.  

Keep annotating the pages of your teaching!